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Title: Ziba Came on a Boat Author: Liz Lofthouse Illustrator: Robert Ingpen Publisher: Penguin Group Date of publication: 2007 Overview of text
Ziba Came on a Boat is a moving story, based on true events of a small girl who travels away from her
home in a ‘soggy old fishing boat’. The story describes her home and what her and her mother have
come from as well as their eventful, seemingly endless journey on the boat.
Although the story does not mention the country in which Ziba and her mother leave, the inside of the
book describes the author’s work with refugees from Afghanistan. Approaching the shore of their new
home, Ziba’s mother also whispers ‘Azadi’ – Freedom, speaking in Afgani.
The story suggests that Ziba was quite fond of her father and for unrevealed circumstances he appears to
be unable to make the journey. Language features
The story is written in both past and present tense as Ziba recalls her experiences in both her home
country and the boat that her and her mother travel in to their new adventure.
Descriptive language is used throughout the story as the author describes the environmental and
situational elements of Ziba’s conditions.
Distinct similarities are made between Ziba’s home life and those experiences on the boat are also made
with use of descriptive similes. E.g. ‘Thoughts of home washed over Ziba like the surge of the sea
washing over the deck’.
Ziba Came on a Boat is written from the perspective of an onlooker, describing Ziba’s journey across the
ocean in past tense. Other textual features (e.g. format, illustrations)
The story interchanges each page between the home that Ziba has left and her experiences on the boat
travelling across the wide ocean to her new home. Although Ziba initially recalls positive experiences
from her home country such as playing with her friends and her father reading to her, this quickly
changes to describe the sea that ‘roared and thrashed’.
The illustrations throughout the book appear to be paintings of dark, shaded colours, depicting different
elements of the environment and Ziba’s feelings towards these. For example, warm orange tones are
used when describing Ziba’s father and dark, smudge colours are used to portray Ziba’s journey in the
boat. Audience: 4‐7 Genre: Fictional picture book
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Title: Ziba Came on a Boat Author: Liz Lofthouse Illustrator: Robert Ingpen
Publisher: Penguin Group Date of publication: 2007
Overview of text
Ziba Came on a Boat is a moving story, based on true events of a small girl who travels away from her
home in a ‘soggy old fishing boat’. The story describes her home and what her and her mother have
come from as well as their eventful, seemingly endless journey on the boat.
Although the story does not mention the country in which Ziba and her mother leave, the inside of the
book describes the author’s work with refugees from Afghanistan. Approaching the shore of their new
home, Ziba’s mother also whispers ‘Azadi’ – Freedom, speaking in Afgani.
The story suggests that Ziba was quite fond of her father and for unrevealed circumstances he appears to
be unable to make the journey.
Language features
The story is written in both past and present tense as Ziba recalls her experiences in both her home
country and the boat that her and her mother travel in to their new adventure.
Descriptive language is used throughout the story as the author describes the environmental and
situational elements of Ziba’s conditions.
Distinct similarities are made between Ziba’s home life and those experiences on the boat are also made
with use of descriptive similes. E.g. ‘Thoughts of home washed over Ziba like the surge of the sea
washing over the deck’.
Ziba Came on a Boat is written from the perspective of an onlooker, describing Ziba’s journey across the
ocean in past tense.
Other textual features (e.g. format, illustrations)
The story interchanges each page between the home that Ziba has left and her experiences on the boat
travelling across the wide ocean to her new home. Although Ziba initially recalls positive experiences
from her home country such as playing with her friends and her father reading to her, this quickly
changes to describe the sea that ‘roared and thrashed’.
The illustrations throughout the book appear to be paintings of dark, shaded colours, depicting different
elements of the environment and Ziba’s feelings towards these. For example, warm orange tones are
used when describing Ziba’s father and dark, smudge colours are used to portray Ziba’s journey in the
boat.
Audience: 4‐7 Genre: Fictional picture book